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[luv2rebel]

Hold my hand and tell me all will b alryt...
Show me Tht u care with a hug so tight...
Tell me I'm great, good and fun...
Tht soon soon, this'll all be gone...
Let me breathe......and feel secure....
Feel safe, protected and reassured....
When rain gushes, and thunder roars with a thud,
When salty tears mix with my blood,
When I get my flashbacks from past and home,
Dont just sit by as I walk all alone........
Hear my desperate cry, see me bite my lips hard,
Watch me blink back the tears, whilst I'm trapped behind the bars...
Sapped of all energy....my cry starts to fade....
Broken from lyf...at such a young age...
My body turns blue from the cold in my heart....
My lyf's at its peak, and I don't wanna even start....
Help me....reach out, I wanna feel loved...
Tell me to come closer, instead of bein shoved...
For me love's a fantasy....embrace me in its sparkle,
Prove me I'm heaven, when i feel despicable.

[shira]

feel the same way

[Role Model Wannabe]

I absolutely loooove this poem! You have a gift, just know that! And the message is clearly conveyed. It is sad how people see other people going through what they're going through and remain silent, and push the person away. It's probably because they don't know how to react, they don't know what to say. Sometimes I'm in that position too, I don't know how to respond to that person, but I still care for them soo much. I'm just afraid that what I'll say will make it worse. When people don't respond, it's not always because they don't care, sometimes it's for the exact opposite reason, they care too much!
Good luck finding the people who care and know how to respond. I believe that frumteens is full of them!!! And if you want to talk, we're here, even if we don't physically say something, just know, we care.

[jew]

This is amazing! I have never seen a poem that speaks to me like this one. The ability to convey what you feel into words is difficult, but writing it into a poem is pure talent. Keep it up!

[luv2rebel]

hey guys...
thanx so much 4 ur feedback...
seriously helps tons!
was bit unsure abt whether or not my poems are good at all, so now i know that they are!
you ppl dont know me, so i guess i should take your praise as the truth! ok, i have a gift!!
will post more poems...
Role Model Wannabe, i'll definitely try keep your comments in mind...hope it helps when i feel i have no one who truly understands that im goni thru ruff tyms, and that a little care would be appreciated...

[jew]

Amazing!!! I guess the way for you to gauge how you're really feeling is through your poems. As you grow in life, notice how your poems will start to have more of a joyous tinge! good luck and keep on writing!

p.s. when you change your username to HATE2REBEL, you know that everything is just fine in your life!

[haunted soul]

this poem is awesome. deep and real. am davvening for you

[luv2rebel]

thank you so much to all of u out there....
just wanna no why?????
why do i hafta go thru all this stuff,
it seems as tho wheneva i try to get ova one hurdle, and i manage,
i get faced with anotha...
how many times could a person try with out just
GIVING UP?????

[invisible]

first of all ur a great writer!!! i read ur stuff and i luv ur poem soft hazel especially

so u ask "why?". its a good question.

i dont know the answer - ive thought about this b4 and i was never rlly able to come up wiith anything yet... though there is one thing i can tell u though from experience:

GIVING UP ISNT WORTH IT!!!!!! i tryed to give up idk why i thought that it would help me. but it just made everything worse. and i just ended up being mad at myself in the end. it may seem so tempting i know... and im no one to tell u this seeing as i gave up myself - but now im back in the game - and i dont feel as hopeless as i did then. still feeling pretty hopeless sometimes yeah but Baruch Hashem not like then!!

another thing - i know ull come up with an answer!!!!!!!!!!! cuz ur asking "why?" and that means ur looking for answers - thats a good thing!!!!! i believe in u that u will find ur own answer - even if it takes awhile - so when u find it plz plz plz post it i wanna hear!!!!!!! u sound like a rlly sweet person who cares about other ppl and hasnt given up yet. i was talking to someone tonight and idk why im writing this i guess i just feel like sharing lol... and she told me to focus on all the good stuff ive done or all the bad stuff i havent done - so when im feeling down on myself and i do that it rlly helps me feel better.

[Feelingjewish]

Omg that poem could have been written by me. Amazing. Toy

[invisible]

wow, just read my post from like a year ago. ive found my happiness now. honestly i didnt think it would happen for me. ill look back and be like woah. that was me then, and this is me now. 

life is still rly hard, honestly. ive learnt to kinda laugh when crazy things happen, even while dealing with them... it took a looooong time for me to get there tho and its not like i got there by myself, i needed someone to pull me out of the ocean i literally felt like i was drowning in at some points.

 

but im happy.

and yea, im also teen whos trying to figure herself out. so things can get insanely confusing

 

but im HAPPY. it boggles the mind. its been like a half a year now and i still find it crazy to think about.

 

know how you feel with the getting through one thing and then having something else come up to struggle with. 

 

ive found an answer for myself, but i think evry1 has to find their own. tell me when you come up with ur answer. i believe you will